Troll and Derp had a fight. Derp won the fight, but he felt sorry for Troll because he didn’t win the fight. For this reason, Derp decided to give Troll six boxes with treats inside it. In the box, Derp put 1/3 of cake and some candies in each six boxes. However, Derp was kidnapped by an alien and was brainwashed after he gave the six boxes to Troll. Derp did not know how many candies he put in each boxes, but he did know that he put 1/3 of cake in each box because the aliens told him. The aliens did not tell Derp how many candies he put in each six boxes. Derp wanted to know how many candies he put in each box, so he asked Troll. Troll, depressed with the fact that he lost the fight knew that Derp was bad at math, so he didn’t tell him how many candies Derp put it in each six boxes, but gave him a small hint saying that the total treats inside the six boxes had 20 treats. Derp, who was mad made an equation to find out how many candies he put in each box.
This story fits well with your given equation, but I thought it was a little bit confusing. Alina tried writing the equation and it does make sense, but as a story (word problem) it was kind of hard to know what is going on. I don’t have anything to say about your grammar and the story was pretty creative. It was funny how you named your characters Derp and Troll!
1)Does the story fit with the equation? Is it functional? Would you actually write this equation from this word story problem? the story does fit the equation and I thin you can use this for your project!
2) Does it make sense, or is it a little confusing? Discuss what is not clear, and suggest improvements. Your story does make sense but I am confused with your equation. I think you can fix this by having less events going on in one story. KIS(Keep it simple)
3) Are there any grammatical mistakes? How should they be corrected? I didn't find any grammar mistakes! Hee hee :)
4) Is the story creative? How could it be made better? I think the story is creative! I like it!
5)What are the positive points about the word problem? I loved how you used Derp and Troll as the characters!! XDD
I like how you were able to make a story out of one of the hardest problems. I also like how you used creativity and named the characters Troll and Derp. The setting and the people in the story is random but I like how it ties with the story very well. The story suites the equation and surprisingly makes sense. There were no grammar mistakes but I think you can simplify the story by not including some events.
Troll and Derp had a fight. Derp won the fight, but he felt sorry for Troll because he didn’t win the fight. For this reason, Derp decided to give Troll six boxes with treats inside it. In the box, Derp put 1/3 of a cake and some candies in each of the six boxes. However, Derp was kidnapped by an alien and was brainwashed after he mailed the six boxes to Troll. So, Derp did not know how many candies he put in each box, but he did know that he put 1/3 of cake in each box because the aliens told him. The aliens did not tell Derp how many candies he put in each of the six boxes though. Derp wanted to know how many candies he put in each box, so he asked Troll. Troll, depressed with the fact that he lost the fight, knew that Derp was bad at mfath, so he didn’t tell him how many candies Derp put it in each of the six boxes, but gave him a small hint saying that the total number of treats inside each box were 20 treats (including the pieces of cakes). Derp, who was mad, made an equation to find out how many treats he put in each box.
Troll and Derp had a fight. Derp won the fight, but he felt sorry for Troll because he didn’t win the fight. For this reason, Derp decided to give Troll six boxes with treats inside it. In the box, Derp put 1/3 of cake and some candies in each six boxes. However, Derp was kidnapped by an alien and was brainwashed after he gave the six boxes to Troll. Derp did not know how many candies he put in each boxes, but he did know that he put 1/3 of cake in each box because the aliens told him. The aliens did not tell Derp how many candies he put in each six boxes. Derp wanted to know how many candies he put in each box, so he asked Troll. Troll, depressed with the fact that he lost the fight knew that Derp was bad at math, so he didn’t tell him how many candies Derp put it in each six boxes, but gave him a small hint saying that the total treats inside the six boxes had 20 treats. Derp, who was mad made an equation to find out how many candies he put in each box.
ReplyDeleteThis story fits well with your given equation, but I thought it was a little bit confusing. Alina tried writing the equation and it does make sense, but as a story (word problem) it was kind of hard to know what is going on. I don’t have anything to say about your grammar and the story was pretty creative. It was funny how you named your characters Derp and Troll!
ReplyDelete1)Does the story fit with the equation? Is it functional? Would you actually write this equation from this word story problem?
ReplyDeletethe story does fit the equation and I thin you can use this for your project!
2) Does it make sense, or is it a little confusing? Discuss what is not clear, and suggest improvements.
Your story does make sense but I am confused with your equation. I think you can fix this by having less events going on in one story. KIS(Keep it simple)
3) Are there any grammatical mistakes? How should they be corrected?
I didn't find any grammar mistakes! Hee hee :)
4) Is the story creative? How could it be made better?
I think the story is creative! I like it!
5)What are the positive points about the word problem?
I loved how you used Derp and Troll as the characters!! XDD
I like how you were able to make a story out of one of the hardest problems. I also like how you used creativity and named the characters Troll and Derp. The setting and the people in the story is random but I like how it ties with the story very well. The story suites the equation and surprisingly makes sense. There were no grammar mistakes but I think you can simplify the story by not including some events.
ReplyDeleteTroll and Derp had a fight. Derp won the fight, but he felt sorry for Troll because he didn’t win the fight. For this reason, Derp decided to give Troll six boxes with treats inside it. In the box, Derp put 1/3 of a cake and some candies in each of the six boxes. However, Derp was kidnapped by an alien and was brainwashed after he mailed the six boxes to Troll. So, Derp did not know how many candies he put in each box, but he did know that he put 1/3 of cake in each box because the aliens told him. The aliens did not tell Derp how many candies he put in each of the six boxes though. Derp wanted to know how many candies he put in each box, so he asked Troll. Troll, depressed with the fact that he lost the fight, knew that Derp was bad at mfath, so he didn’t tell him how many candies Derp put it in each of the six boxes, but gave him a small hint saying that the total number of treats inside each box were 20 treats (including the pieces of cakes). Derp, who was mad, made an equation to find out how many treats he put in each box.
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